User:Tsang Karl/Ketone Halogenation/Cemes4 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Tsang Karl


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Tsang%20Karl/Ketone_Halogenation?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Ketone halogenation

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead


 * No clear lead in draft or on wikipedia page
 * Might be useful to briefly explain what ketone halogenation is before getting into the mechanism/ how it works
 * Current lead on the wikipedia page lacks an introductory sentence or a tittle

Content


 * Added content is relevant to the topic and does a good job of expanding on the current wiki page
 * An additional talking point for the article could be the applications of ketone halogenation ie how common of a practice is this in industry (if you are looking for more to add later)

Tone and Balance


 * All content added is neutral and does not try to point reader towards an opinion

Sources and References


 * Draft has minimal references cited directly in text
 * Reliable references are used
 * As noted in the draft, not all references are formatted properly/ are missing some information
 * The references listed look good but I would suggest finding more than one source for each talking point

Organization


 * Draft contains some spelling and grammar errors, but does not affect clarity of work
 * Some sentences are long in the green chemistry section which could use rephrasing
 * Flow and clarity of the draft could be improved by adding headings and subheadings to divide each topic

Images and Media


 * No images/ media in draft
 * Note made in document to edit current mechanism on page to be more clear → good idea
 * Might be too much to add mechanisms for every reaction if you plan to discuss more than a few
 * Could incorporate images showing the starting materials and final product(s) and describe the process verbally