User:Tuh20608/Shinto shrine/Josephrkopta Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

User:Tuh20608


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Tuh20608/Shinto_shrine


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Shinto shrine

Lead
The lead as you've revised it is much improved– in the original article the information after the first few sentences is probably better served in a separate section. (By the way, where did the other info from the lead go– paragraphs 2, 3, 4? Is it being moved to a different section? You could probably just move it down to after the contents if you're not sure what to do with it.)

It looks like this article has an active talk page, so I'd recommend posting what you plan to do there so the other editors can review it.

Content
A question:

In your "early origins" section, are you planning on replacing the current "early origins" with your updated text? I think you've clarified the language in this section, but what is missing are citations – it looks like the current article has citations in a couple places (even if they are the same one), but you'll definitely need to include these in your next draft before it moves out into the "main space."

Your new sections on "Re-enshrinment" and "Destruction of Shinto Shrine" are really solid additions!

Tone and Balance
Your text seems to be presented in a fair and neutral way.

Sources and References
I see your references at the bottom of your article draft, plus on your bibliography page. These all look like solid sources in English. What you need to do in your next round, and before your text goes up on Wikipedia, is insert citations in the text (I'm sure you know that you need to do this!)

Images and Media
I think the original article actually has pretty good images and media already, so maybe this isn't something you need to address at all. What do you think?

Overall impressions
You've done a lot of fabulous work on this article. This is a measurable improvement on its structure and quality. You will certainly get feedback on it from the active Wikipedia community, so if someone changes what you've done once it's up on the main space, don't fret– this is normal! Remember, you can always share your ideas on the talk page as you update each piece.