User:Tuh20608/Shinto shrine/Lilybillow Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?
 * I am reviewing Tuh20608's article

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 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Tuh20608/Shinto_shrine?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Shinto shrine

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Overall I think this is a good start, It appears you have edited and moved around some parts of the article. I Think the changes you made to the lead was good and helped to simplify it more. Overall this article seems neutral and unbiased. I noticed that for the architecture section you pasted the Shintai section into that area, I'm not sure why you did that. I think that its not quite as clear this way. Making a more general run down might be better, I think there may be too much information put in that section. I also noticed you did not put in any footnotes, I think that you should go back into your edits and make sure to put sources next to the information. I also noticed most of the sources are from over ten years ago, trying to find more recent sources with new information might be helpful. this may help to add more information that is recent.