User:Tul10616/Aniconism in Judaism/Llgilpin03 Peer Review

General info
tul10616
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Tul10616/Aniconism in Judaism - Wikipedia
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Aniconism in Judaism - Wikipedia

Evaluate the drafted changes
I like that you added something to the lead section. In the original article, I thought it was too brief. Maybe add some more to make it a paragraph? Maybe you can briefly introduce the sections. I just feel like it could use some more content since it's such a small lead.

When writing your contributions to the article, maybe copy the surrounding paragraphs so we can get an idea of where you plan to add what you wrote. When I read what you wrote in your sandbox, I was confused as to where that would be in the article.

I see that you added some more content to the Recent Media section. I would also say add citations to that section since it's missing a lot. I would also say add citations to the In Modern Israel section since it has the same issue.

Overall, I think the content you added was relevant to the topic. I mentioned previously about giving us an idea of where your contributions would be in the article, which would help me gauge the relevance easier. The content seems neutral. Your sources look valid, I see a few of them came from journals.

I think your contributions will help the article become more complete. You really did your research and compiled the information into an understandable paragraph.