User:Tumpanek/Blood phobia/Diveguy1 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Tumpanek


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Tumpanek/Blood phobia
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Blood phobia

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

All of the information added seems very relevant to the article and the references are accurate. Sentences are complete and make sense and all adde valuable information to the article.

The 5 parts added seem to be in different categories though - the first two are physiological traits (heart rate, vagus nerve), and the third sentence has to do with how widespread it is (epidemiology),for example. Perhaps these parts could be better integrated into one single section, or revised to have a narrower focus on just one aspect of blood phobia (physiology only, for example).

Overall this will be a valuable contribution to Wikipedia.