User:Turnwaldm/Richland Balsam/Emmadeitz Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Turnwaldm


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Turnwaldm/Richland Balsam


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Richland Balsam

Evaluate the drafted changes
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I think that this article needs a lead section that is clear. It is unclear as to what is and isn't the lead section. This could be as simple as moving information around and adding headings. There really isn't much to the original article. I think that this article needs better organization so its easier for the reader to understand. I really like the topics that you included in your sandbox. I thin k that they will benefit the original article. I think that the "hiking" section is a good addition because a lot of people go there to do that. I also think the seasonality and camping section is important because they are common things people going to the area will want to know. The plants and animals section will be a really good addition, especially because the article doesn't talk about it. Your sources seem reliable and non- biased! I would add some photos so the reader can visualize the mountains, other than that I think that this is going to be a great article!