User:Turtle232/Ontological insecurity/Magolaya Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Turtle232


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Draft:Ontological insecurity
 * Draft:Ontological insecurity

Evaluate the drafted changes
This was a topic I had not heard of before and your article provided me with an excellent general understanding of it. Your lead was concise and outlined the article well, however some of the language used was a little complex. I can tell that your article is well-researched based on the amount of citations you used, I like the fact that there is such a wide variety so that all the information is not coming from the same source. Lastly, you have a very strong and informative writing style, your article was easy to understand but still provided me with depth on the topic.

My only suggestion would be a change of structure. Each of your sections should have their own heading because they are all different topics, they should not all be under the title heading.