User:Turtlesinthesand/Mental health in the Middle East/Sscorpio18 Peer Review

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Turtlesinthesand
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 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Editing User:Turtlesinthesand/Mental health in the Middle East - Wikipedia
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 * Mental health in the Middle East - Wikipedia:

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead:

The article draft does not touch on the lead however the information provided relates to it so the lead is understandable on its own.

Content:

The content provided is up to date and relates to the topic, and it adds a new area that helps the reader understand the topic more. Furthermore, the provided content is not presented in a persuasive manner, instead it is factual.

Sources and references:

All the sources provided are up to date and have a range of different authors. The sources also provide valid information related to the topic.

Organization:

The content added to the article is well written and easy to read. There Arnet any grammatical mistakes in the article except one spelling mistake " abnormalness".

Overall impressions:

Overall, the information provided is clear and objective; however, it does contain phrases like " many people" which might be an issue for a Wikipedia article. So a way to improve this article would be to checking if all the information is objective and isn't leaning to being a persuasive argument.