User:Tyrcles/Preventive nutrition/GGHTOO Peer Review

General info
Tyrcles
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:
 * Editing User:Tyrcles/Preventive nutrition - Wikipedia
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Preventive nutrition - Wikipedia

Evaluate the drafted changes
The lead has been updated a bit, but it does not reflect the new content added by Tyrcles. The lead includes an introductory sentence that concisely and clearly describes the article's topic, but it does not include a brief description of the article's major sections. However, the content added is relevant to the topic and are up to date. As for the tone and balance, the content added was neutral without any claims that appear heavily biased toward a particular position. The content added does not really attempt to persuade the reader in favor of one position or away from another as well. Part of the new content is backed by a reliable secondary source, but not the other part. However, the content does accurately reflect what the cited sources say, and the sources are also thorough and current, but does not include a diverse spectrum of authors. The links for the cited sources work, but there are better sources that are available for Tyrcles to use. For the organization aspect, the content added is well-written and well-organized and has little to no grammatical or spelling errors. Overall, the content added improved the overall quality of the article, which is one of its strengths as well as making the two sections of the article more informative. However, one thing that could be done to improve the content is by using a better secondary source, such as a peer-reviewed article. They can try using google scholar to find better sources that are more likely to be peer-reviewed.