User:Tyswitzer/Sneaker collecting/Meadowsadeh382004 Peer Review

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 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Tyswitzer


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 * User:Tyswitzer/Sneaker collecting
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Sneaker collecting

Evaluate the drafted changes
- Copy and paste the original article written and go read through it to make sure there are no grammar mistakes. It also may help to rewrite some of the paragraphs to help you understand the topic more.

- Amazing job citing sources

- I see no grammar mistakes. Very well written and easy to ready.

- This paragraph reminds me of the song Wings from Macklemore. I believe there was a lyric that spoke about how cool he was that he got these sneakers because he is just like the big league's. This could be something you could add since you explain the feeling of buying new shoes.

- I do not know when this article was written but you could totally add more recent terms to the sneaker slang.

- I think you should switch around where each of the sections are. Maybe add slang to the bottom since it is less important to the whole article.

- You could also talk about Virgil, Grailed, Yeezys recent downfall -- just more recent events In the sneaker world

- also add a section about popular sneaker reselling shops like round two