User:Tytygo/South African English/Dquin3 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

I'm reviewing Tytygo's group article on South African English.


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Tytygo/South_African_English?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * South African English

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead

-The lead about Black South African English is well written and it does reflect what was added by my peers and what is going to be talked about. The introductory sentence defines and describes what Black South African English. Something that is missing in the lead is that it does not include a description about the major points and sections in the article. The lead is clear and concise and everything that is mentioned, is brought up again in later sections.

Content

-The content added to the article is very relevant to Black South African English and is up to date. Some content that can be added is the alphabet that is used such as vowels and consonants, semantics, syntax, etc. There is a geography section in the draft but nothing has been added yet. It would be interesting to see Black South African English in that aspect. There is also nothing under classification when it comes to the language.

Tone and Balance

-The article is neutral and does not seem like it is biased whatsoever. It is all very factual and not opinionated at all.

Sources and References

-Although the draft so far is full of good information about Black South African English, there are not enough sources to back up what is being said. There are a lot of areas in the article that are missing sources or references that should have them. However, what is cited in the article is done properly. The sources are somewhat out of date so maybe add more sources that are more up to date to balance everything out references wise. The references section at the bottom of the article needs to get fixed because some of the sources are not typed out properly/cited properly. There is also a source that does not have a link at all.

Organization

-Overall, the draft is organized. The sections are labeled properly and it tells the reader what the section is going to be about relating to Black South African English. In my opinion, the draft is pretty clear about everything that was mentioned. The only thing that I found that needs to be changed is shortening some of the sentences because they were run-ons. I do also see some grammatical errors but not so much spelling errors.

Images and Media

-Currently, there are no images that helps understand the topic of Black South African English. I suggest adding some images throughout the article once it is mostly done so it is visible what needs to be enhanced for a better comprehension and understanding.

Overall Impressions

-I enjoyed reading the draft for the article. After reading both the officially published article and the draft, I could see that the draft is going to help the official one feel more complete. Some of the strengths are that everything is very easy to understand while reading, and all the sections that are typed out are full of great information. Some of the content could be improved by citing more sources and adding more information to areas that seem emptier or not as complete.