User:UC1795/User:Himalayan Edelweiss/Ocean acidification in the Great Barrier Reef/UC1795 Peer Review

General info
Himalayan Edelweiss (Audrey Larson)
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Himalayan Edelweiss/Ocean acidification in the Great Barrier Reef
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Ocean acidification in the Great Barrier Reef

Evaluate the drafted changes
I think that Audrey's edits did a good job of adding clarity and improving overall flow of the article, without being too verbose or off-topic. I also think that her decision to emphasize the impacts of different species on the ecosystem, including the threats posed by the Crown of Thorns Sea Star and their impact on Eslamobranchii populations, as well as the populations of other rare and endangered species.

However, I am unclear as to how some of the edits she makes fit into the larger picture of the article, particularly some of the notes about the Sea Star and how it is dying at the same rate as the coral it feeds on. I think that this part of the article could be fleshed out more.

I think that the one change that could be made to improve the article would be to try to quantify the impacts of acidification on ecosystem health and biodiversity, as it could help the reader better understand the scale of the damage being done.

The structure and state of this article vastly differed from the article I am working on - mine was essentially two paragraphs while this article was fully fleshed out - so it is hard to draw much from it that would be applicable to mine. I think one thing that I could take away from it, though, is the importance of article structure and ensuring that the article has a good and consistent flow.