User:UC Student Anon/Tetinchoua/Gnaparicio Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?
 * UC student Anon

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 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:UC Student Anon/Tetinchoua
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

This paper is clear and informative. I think that it would be better if some of the terms were either linked to their wiki page or if there are not wiki pages then it a further explanation (just 1 or 2 sentences) just to allow the reader and audience with a better understanding and better explanation. Also there is a part where a game of ball is discussed, but I think it would help to clarify what exactly the game of ball is and what the concept is. I also notice that your “Origin of Chieftainship” section is a little short. I think giving more detail about giving a short compare and contrast of the Alonquian traditions. By short, I mean only one or two sentences just to give the reader more content. Or you could tag the Alonquian wiki page, if there is one. For the last section-are there any movements specifically within this community?