User:UCstudent2023/Marine mammal park/Sawadoky Peer Review

General info
Kennedy, UCstudents2023
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing.
 * User:UCstudent2023/Marine mammal park - Wikipedia:
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Marine mammal park - Wikipedia

Lead in
I really liked your article, I'm glad someone was interested in animals' safety. and from reading it you really did your research, there's a lot of information, well done. But I feel like you were more focused on Orcas than marine mammals in general. and when you said, "Studies show that almost all of these Orcas will die for reasons other than old age while they are still in captivity." I feel like it'll be a good thing to actually list those reasons. also, I might steal your idea of having an overview as your first section.

Lead section
Your overview section is pretty good, It reflects all the important information. It doesn't give more weight to certain parts over others, and nothing is missing.

Structure
Your sections are well organized, you got the overview, orcas life, how to prevent animal captivity and your references at the bottom, I think that's the best way to have it. but I feel like it'll be a good idea to add on to your last section (prevention). And it looks like you left out most marine mammals. And your article is not really neutral it's kind of convincing readers that animal captivity is bad.

Neutral content
Reading the article, I could guess your perspective, but the good thing is there's no phrases or words that's unneutral and there's no claims on behalf of unnamed people, but it focuses too much on convincing readers how bad animal captivity is.

Reliable source
I clicked through the links, they worked perfectly fine and they're from reliable websites. There's not a lot of statements attributed to one or two sources and there's no unsourced statements in the article.

Reviewer reflection
Based on this review I plan to
 * 1) Have an overview section.
 * 2) Add on to my last section (proof of alien existence)
 * 3) Review my article and make sure it's neutral.