User:UNDRand4/Newcomer education/Elsen.gregory Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

UNDRand4


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:UNDRand4/Newcomer education
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
Hi there,

Overall, your explanation of Newcomer education is very clear and it defines the topic. If this is the lead section, you may want to consider laying out what the subsections of the article will be as well

When I was reading your first paragraph I noticed that you started talking about Newcomer education as an American program. Do these programs only exist in the United States? Are there similar programs in other countries, and if so, do they go by the same name. One issue I have encountered in the article I am reviewing is that much of the research presented focuses on the United States even though this topic does not only impact that the US. I wonder if that is something to consider here.

One sentence I am a little concerned about is "In order to implement a successful literacy-focused program, there should be a selected set of elements that should be considered, fourteen to be exact." Is this a fact or the opinion of an author? Right now it sounds like you are stating this as a fact, and I am not sure that is what you want.

Greg