User:UNDRand4/Newcomer education/TeachTESOL Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

UNDRand4


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:UNDRand4/Newcomer_education?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Newcomer education

Peer Review
Lead

It's unclear whether the section titled 'Newcomer Program' is intended to be the new lead section for the entire article (which would change the title of the article and change the topic altogether), or if this is a proposed new content section under the existing topic of 'Newcomer Education'. For the purpose of this review, I'll assume that 'Newcomer Program' is meant to be a new content section listed under the main topic of 'Newcomer Education'.

Content

The proposed content sections, 'Newcomer Program' and 'Newcomer Program Literacy Instruction Focus' primarily discuss newcomer programs as they are found in the United States. Since many different countries have their own newcomer programs, the editor may want to specify in the heading of these sections that this information pertains to the U.S. specifically (ex.: 'U.S. Newcomer Programs'), or remove the U.S. focus altogether and describe the variety of newcomer programs found worldwide. The 'Newcomer Program Literacy Instruction Focus' section also seems to focus primarily on the suggestions of one source, and may benefit from more reliable sources and a more general overview of literacy instruction practices.

Tone and Balance

The proposed sections seem to have a slight bias toward recommending newcomer programs and only mention the positives of such programs. The editor may want to avoid words like "should" and avoid describing such programs as "helpful" or "successful", and rather simply state the findings of research conducted on such programs.

Sources and References

The sources used seem to be current and reputable, but the editor may want to expand on this list of sources. The 'Newcomer Program' section in particular is in need of more sources to back up the claims that are made.

Organization

The 'Newcomer Program Literacy Instruction Focus' section seems to be an extension of the 'Newcomer Program' section, and therefore may want to be incorporated into this section or be made into a subheading under this section. The proposed content may want to be reworded a bit to reflect a more neutral tone, and to make the sentences and paragraphs flow a little more smoothly.

Images and Media

The images added to the 'Newcomer Program Literacy Instruction Focus' section relate well to the topic of the section, particularly the components suggested by Custodio (2011). The images have good, descriptive captions and adhere to Wikipedia's copyright regulations as they are the editor's own works.