User:UNique04/A Hero Ain't Nothin' but a Sandwich (novel)/Archeddar Peer Review

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UNique04
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I went through the published wiki article for the peer review.

Lead: I thought the lead was good and have neutral language. One thing that can possibly be added is a sentence about possible themes of the book or topics the book is addressing.

Plot Summary: I liked the plot summary. But if you have time and are looking for more things to write, I wonder if you can add to the plot summary and make it more detailed. So maybe a short explanation of what happens in each chapter or just more details overall about the book.

Characters: For Benjie's character, one of the sentences written is "Her character is resilient yet defined by the stereotypes of single Black mothers." I felt like the idea of stereotypes came out of nowhere and was not expanded upon. I wonder if you think that this should just be deleted entirely or written about more and given more of an explanation.

For Butler Craig's character, I feel like this sentence was confusing "He strives to be the male figure Benjie's heart desires—his aloof relationship with Benjie halts when he saves his life." I feel that sentence can be re-written more clearly. And that it can be explained more.

For Nigeria Greene, this sentence was confusing and I think needs to be re-written: "He sees firsthand the effects of drugs on his student Benjie and fights for his turn in to the principal for his drug intoxication in school." It' the fights for his turn in to the principal part that doesn't make sense.

I think the biggest piece missing on the wiki article is a section about themes. Adding more information about themes would make it definitely more well-rounded! Overall, I thought everything was neutral-sounding and adhered to wiki guidelines.