User:Ucblueashmorgan/User:Ucblueashmorgan/sandbox/PiratePale Peer Review

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 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:Ucblueashmorgan/sandbox:Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Animal communication:

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Electrolocating is something I've never heard of, I only know about echolocating. I would like to read more about it! There are plenty of sources used! There are some grammar and spelling mistakes that could be fixed, and maybe some fleshing out of the current statements would be good improvements! Sadly, our articles are on very different topics, so I couldn't find anything that I could translate to my own article.

The sections are in a sensible order, even though they are being added to a larger article. I would say that the sections could be a bit longer and fleshed out, but I have not found anything off topic. I do not feel like the author is trying to sway me into thinking in a specific way about how animals communicate.

The author's work is very neutral, but there are some places when non-specific things are used. "Animals are looked at as teachers and guiders of communication with spirits of nature." Who believes this, and does it contribute to some form of religion? The information in the article is neither negative or positive, it speaks only of communication.

The author's sources are a bit older, and might not be as current as they could be. But, many of them are from journals and one is even a masters' thesis.

One revision I plan to make on my own article is a more neutral tone, like the one reflected here. Another revision I plan to make is to ensure that I do not use non-specific terms when listing someone's opinion. The final revision I plan to make based off of this article is to add more content and sources to my own article.