User:Uclastudent2021/Martha Ramirez-Oropeza/Chicanaart2021 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Uclastudent2021


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Uclastudent2021/Martha_Ramirez-Oropeza?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead

You do a good job of keeping your lead concise. It is somewhat short so I'd suggest maybe adding what materials she uses to create her art if that's something you have information about.

Biography/Early Life

Starting your second sentence with "Thus" is a bit choppy, I'd suggest removing the period and replacing it with a comma and changing the T in thus to a lowercase t. In the fourth sentence I'd change the "with" to "which", I'm pretty sure that's what you meant to do. For your final sentence I might change "Her experiences then..." to "These experiences lead her to..."

Overall

All sentences have proper citations which is great since this is essential to this project! The last sentence which talks about her award from the Durfee foundation could possibly be moved to her bibliography sentence towards the end so all her achievements are in the same area making it easier to find. You seem to have a good amount of references and external links which is really good!