User:Uiseon1012/Post-traumatic stress disorder/CleanBean Peer Review

General info
Uiseon1012
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Uiseon1012/Post-traumatic_stress_disorder?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Post-traumatic stress disorder

Evaluate the drafted changes
Hey Sunny, good start on your edit. I'd suggest re-reading your sentences before submission. The fourth sentence had way too many words added that weren't necessary. I bet you were trying to type all that was going on in your head; I do that sometimes too lol. Just proofread to make sure you got your story straight. Also, if you want to include a sentence like your third one, please add a transition sentence. It was a little off putting for that to be there after the definitions. Maybe try stating the research papers you looked at and then proceed to talk about one of them (or all of them, if you'd like).