User:Uiseon1012/Post-traumatic stress disorder/Mrs.Egyptian Peer Review

General info
Uiseon1012
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:Uiseon1012/Post-traumatic stress disorder - Wikipedia
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Post-traumatic stress disorder - Wikipedia

Evaluate the drafted changes
The first thing I noticed with the article itself was the lack of pictures. There are only two, I think two more could be added. The draft appears to have changed when it comes to how it is written. It is very hard to try and not create a paper without it sounding like things you have researched. I think a good trick would be to just type things how they are by not adding too much personalization to it (hope that makes sense). The layout is structured well. I am not sure how old our articles can be, but I did see that there is an article from 2004 used. I would not know if this would still be considered credible now. All in all check back over your resources and also try change your writing style.