User:Ujons/Entropy and life/Aulses Peer Review

General info
Ujons
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Ujons/Entropy and life:
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Entropy and life

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead section:


 * a citation for the claim that life occurs at constant temperature and pressure

Entropy balancing:


 * when defining what the variables in the equations are, maybe make it clear what B is, I'm not sure if its some iterative variable or a physical quantity
 * where it says 'from the second law' maybe be specific that its the laws of thermodynamics

Implications for metabolism:


 * link endothermic, or some wikipedia page that explains what that is in more detail
 * also maybe I missed it, but the first time you mention metabolism, or metabolic pathways I would also link that
 * same with anaerobic and thermophile
 * after the second equation, in the first paragraph, the current explanation on how the different terms relate to each other is a little confusing. I'm not sure what it means by 'optimal balance'. This may not be definable, in which case I would say that in the text

Entropy and the search for ET life:


 * link the Viking missions & chemotrophic life

Entropy and the OoL:


 * link redox, enzymes, proton gradient (to pH probably)
 * if there's a good synonym for 'incipient' I would change the word choice, I'm not sure of the definition myself

Really interesting topic! As for the edits (this goes for your other page as well), most are minor because I'm not sure how much detail one can actually feasibly put into a Wiki article without it becoming a paper. But the descriptions you've given are sufficient to get the idea across, which is what matters the most I'd say.