User:Umiuottawa/English as a second or foreign language/Volt101 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

I am reviewing Umiuottawa.


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Learning.Cmputers


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * English as a second or foreign language - Wikipedia

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

I am reviewing Umiuottawa.

New additional information was added to the section labelled "Technology".

Lead:

- Leads are well written and tell the reader more about the content within. However, perhaps sub leads should be considered as the content paragraphs are quite lengthy.

Content:

- The content seems up to date and relevant to the article's main subject. Adding links to different pages connected to the different types of technologies would perhaps help better connect this article to other Wiki articles. There are a few grammatical errors that need to be fixed in this article.

Tone:

- The tone in this article is fairly well balanced. There are times that it might seem a bit persuasive in nature, but overall great job.

Organization:

- The additions seem very well organized and easy to follow.

Sources:

Perhaps more sources could be added. There are a few claims within some sections, such as the AR section that use 1 or two sources. I would advise to maybe try having a few more sources to back up the content. My concern would be that this article would be flagged for potential plagiarism based on Wikipedia's criteria.

Images:

- There were no images or videos added to this article.

Overall, I really enjoyed this article. I did feel a bit overwhelmed by the information but this was very informative. I would advise though to add more sources in order to avoid any chances of plagiarism.


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Learning.Cmputers


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * English as a second or foreign language - Wikipedia