User:Unknownusername2000/History of the Catholic Church in Mexico/JWesleyPowell Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Unknownusername2000


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Unknownusername2000/History_of_the_Catholic_Church_in_Mexico?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * History of the Catholic Church in Mexico
 * History of the Catholic Church in Mexico

Evaluate the drafted changes
The tone is largely good, and avoids becoming biased or opinionated, which is in line with the style of writing desired for a Wikipedia project such as this. Additionally, the sources that have been included in the bibliography are also good, with a wide variety of opinions and dates of publishing. This is important and demonstrates changes in opinions on the subject over the years, solid stuff. Citations are good, although it could be worth adding one or two more, any time a claim or statement is made, a citation should be made to back it up and provide reference for the reader.

I understand that this is a draft, so for the final version you might want to reconsider some sentence structures, particularly this one

"In some cities in Mexico, from liberal theology came Christian Based communities. that become prominent and successful."

The second half seems a bit short, but I imagine this will be developed/changed for the final version. Additionally, throughout the draft there is a tendency to use the word some quite a lot. This is okay every now and then, but should really be replaced with specifics. For example,

"Some of the liberation theology movements were led by women as well."

or

"There would be different kinds of progressive Churches in Mexico focusing on catholicism but also the views of liberation theology"

Which progressive churches? Would it be worth just including one or two?

The first could be expanded upon by including either one or two examples of movements led by women, which would add to the article and highlight some specifics. Additionally, you might want to consider thinking about which subsection this is going under, or if it is going to be its own subsection. If this is the case, might be worth reading the section above and below and thinking about how they flow together.

Aside from that, just some minor grammar and formatting things (Capital C for Catholicism etc) but otherwise great start!