User:Urmilav/Homelessness in the San Francisco Bay Area/Avaellea Peer Review

General info
urmilav
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Urmilav/Homelessness_in_the_San_Francisco_Bay_Area?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Homelessness in the San Francisco Bay Area

Evaluate the drafted changes
The lead has been updated to reflect new content by my peer. Urmila has drafted a whole new section for her wiki article for the pandemic. The content added by Urmila does relate to the relevancy of the topic. She has added information regarding covid 19 and a project called Project Roomkey. I felt that she addressed important point regarding what the pandemic brought amongst society and how it impacted different populations of people.

She emphasized how the project focused on housing white individuals even though those of color were suffering significantly. In reading her additions, I do think her tone was well balanced and provided neutrality as she didn't stray in one direction over another in what her thoughts about the project were but raising awareness to the pros and cons of what the program offered. T

he new content is backed up by reliable sources. I know from Urmila utilizes good sources that provide the needed information for this kind of work. The information did reflect acuariley on what she has added in her sandbox. The sources listed are current as they are from 2021, 2023 and 2022. She included sources from three different authors which showed diversity amongst the information she had added. The links did work for me.

I think that the content is well written. For me the room for improvement could be in the organizational aspect. Reading through it she had mentioned the Homekey grant program but then didn't really explain what that brought to the picture. I also think the transition word of In essence for me was a little weird and maybe could be replaced with another conclusion worthy transition phrase.

I think that the content did overall was a nice addition and shed light on a new project that was brought to the Bay area. The content was good and I felt she brought a lot of detail about the project that told the reader what it was and what it did for those living in homelessness. Once again, i think the content added was good, maybe just a few tweaks for clarity and flow could be helpful.