User:Username89713/Necropolitics/BLC340 Peer Review

General info
Username89713
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Username89713/Necropolitics?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Necropolitics

Evaluate the drafted changes
The Lead has not been updated to reflect the new content added by the peer. The content provides good examples of extractivism in necropolitics and brings up lots of good points. It addresses topics that may have been historically unrepresented and overlooked, ergo it brings good content. That being said, because the contribution mainly pools information from one source, it may unintentionally be biased because the author of the book is arguing on a certain point. There definitely needs to be more sources referenced in the paragraphs and maybe more from different backgrounds to provide a well-rounded, informational page. There are currently no citation links or reference sections. The content is well-written and easy to read. The language is very similar to one of an essay, rather than a Wikipedia article, but other than that the information is presented well. The organization is similar to an academic essay as well, so changing it a little bit may help with the organization of the different sections on the page. There also needs to be introductions for every person or organization discussed as well as a citation from those sources. There are some small grammatical errors as well throughout the article. Some quotation marks are used without anything cited. But overall, it is an important topic to add to the page about necropolitics and is bringing lots of useful information about topics that have been overlooked in the past.