User:Username89713/Necropolitics/Lily.sophia.kate Peer Review

General info
Username89713
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Username89713/Necropolitics?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Necropolitics
 * Necropolitics

Evaluate the drafted changes
While this draft is well-written and clear, it is somewhat unbalanced in the sense that it only draws upon Arboleda's ideas from Planetary Mine and does not cite other reliable secondary sources. Also, while Arboleda does cite Mbembe's idea of necropolitics to discuss labor issues for mining workers in Chile, I am not sure how relevant Arboleda's arguments are to the Wikipedia article of necropolitics as a whole. To improve this contribution, I would suggest only briefly mentioning Arboleda's example of the necropolitics of Chile's mining industry, because I feel that this is a good example to help the reader understand the concept of necropolitics. Then, I would look for other reliable secondary sources to cite other examples or provide further information about necropolitics around the world. This could also be a potential way to address one of Wikipedia's equity gaps, such as searching for outside sources that explore how necropolitics affects an underrepresented group. Overall, drawing from more than one source can help prevent bias and make this contribution more well-rounded and informative.