User:Usrbodie/Report/SomberIvy Peer Review

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Evaluate the drafted changes
Hello!

I think one of the biggest things that this article needs is sources! To me, there's a lot of language that can be considered biased since there is no evidence to support what is being said. The sources being used currently and pretty iffy too. The 4th source definitely should be removed. I couldn't find a source that covers exactly what the original 4th source covers, but this one I found covers three types of reports: https://www.bmj.com/content/344/bmj.d8141.abstract For the 3rd source I would look into if it is acceptable or not; I think it isn't, but I'm not 100% sure.

Here are a couple more sources that may be useful!
https://books.google.com/books?hl=en&lr=&id=vw5kDwAAQBAJ&oi=fnd&pg=PP9&dq=written+reports&ots=nBXDaRhwL5&sig=n2JMrfF6-vdwTFEJGWjFALRkGKc#v=onepage&q=written%20reports&f=false

https://books.google.com/books?hl=en&lr=&id=byoxDQAAQBAJ&oi=fnd&pg=PT6&dq=written+reports&ots=Nsp3ivmFeA&sig=Wxo2fM_MnjfbH-jlNfp4XyCcNq0#v=onepage&q=written%20reports&f=false\

https://www.sciencedirect.com/science/article/pii/S0965230204000347

https://eric.ed.gov/?id=ED214163

https://academic.oup.com/jpepsy/article/41/5/493/2579928

http://www.uefap.com/materials/history/wur.pdf

These sources may help with the "Structure of a report" or "Attributes section" :
https://www.tandfonline.com/doi/abs/10.1080/00031305.1982.10483042

https://books.google.com/books?hl=en&lr=&id=vw5kDwAAQBAJ&oi=fnd&pg=PP9&dq=writing+reports&ots=nBXDaRhAO0&sig=sOYw1uflOur8b5E_n2nwEDjsEts#v=onepage&q=writing%20reports&f=false

https://eric.ed.gov/?id=ED128803

One other larger issue you might want to focus on is the lead! There's a lot of room for improvement. The current lead really is just one sentence. Editing it so that it clearly states the purpose of the article and so that it includes a brief description of the articles major sections would be a good place to start.

Best of luck!