User:Vagonius Thicket-Suede/Mangrove/Candid Capybara Peer Review

General info
Vagonius Thicket-Suede
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 * Link to draft you're reviewing.
 * User:Vagonius Thicket-Suede/Mangrove - Wikipedia
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Mangrove - Wikipedia

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead

The lead has yet to be updated to reflect the new content added. I like the addition of acknowledging Lemon Sharks due to a section addressing the species. The introductory sentence to the article itself does not address the article itself, but what a mangrove is and typically what types of water they thrive in. The lead does contain a description of the sections following it, though I do believe it could use some shortening. I understand that this is a bulky article, but that does not mean that the lead section cannot be concise and still get the point across. The lead section is acting as a background sentient to mangroves,, which is not a bad thing, but the article could benefit from a background section to organize it better and shift “unnecessary” information from the lead into the new section.

Content

The content added is relevant to the topic, though it would be nice to see more modifications and progress in displaying the relationship between biodiversity and mangroves. The article does not deal with one of Wikipedia’s equity gaps, though depending on what research can be found about Lemon Sharks and other species that rely on mangrove biodiversity and wellbeing, this could be addressed if more information is found. I know with my own ecofeminism research, there are several Panamanian women making strides in preserving mangroves, so I recommend checking that information out and continue to add to the biodiversity and conservation portions of the article itself. It would be nice to add “why” we should be wrorrying about this besides filtration and other ecosystem services mangroves give. It also could be interesting to add more to the mangrove microbiome section and a mangrove biodiversity and conservation section in particular.

Tone and Balance

The tone of the edits and entire article is neutral and there is no bias. There is no persuasion present either.

Sources and References

Additional articles are backed by reliable secondary sources, has been eper reviewed, and have been cited in other research. I do think that this person is still working on adding this information to the article, thus I cannot say if the content accurately reflects what the cited sources say. However, with what has been added thus far with the Lemon Sharks, it does seem like the information presented is aligning with the article and what is being presented in the resource. I think more information about species assemblages, regardless of Lemon Sharks and birds, would be very beneficial to what is going on in mangrove systems in the midst of anthropogenic influence. The links to the articles work and they are inclusive of BIPOC researchers.

Organization

The content added seems well-written. I do think that there is room for improvement toward the article itself. See the edits on Google document for grammatical and spelling modifications.

Images and Media

No images or media was added to the article, though there is room for this due to the additional sections about Lemon Sharks and potentially highlighting mangrove deforestation.

Overall Impressions

I think that the potential modifications to the article could improve the quality of the article, but it is a little hard to evaluate based on the modifications made. It would be very beneficial to look into various effects of mangrove deforestation on species such as the Lemon Shark and mangrove crabs, alongside with highlighting conservation efforts by governments and nonprofit organizations. There is definitely still room for improvement, but I believe this is a good start and I hope to see an actual conservation section highlighting efforts, Alongside with subsections in the article highlighting species like the Lemon Shark. Definitely look for more resources and reference other wiki pages for conservation efforts and various mangrove-habiting species.