User:Vale.ramir04/Pesticide poisoning/Ylim4 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Vale.ramir04


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Vale.ramir04/Pesticide_poisoning?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Pesticide poisoning - Wikipedia

Lead
Guiding questions:


 * The paragraph present is relevant to the topic of the page however I do not feel like this lead I completed yet. This paragraph does give a good overview on what the topic is on.

Content
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 * There are yet to be other subsections added. The information is relevant to the topic and is not overly detailed

Tone and Balance
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 * . In terms of tone, it is fairly unbiased but I some of the wording makes it seem like some parts are more emphasized than the other. Phrases like "not only" in "not only affect farm workers" could be better rephrased. I also notice the use of words like seem when addressing statistics and side effects of exposure. This makes it seem like the information is not entirely reliable and there is doubt in the information being provided.

Sources and References
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 * . The sources seem reliable with Vale.ramir04 sourcing from journals and overall unbiased sources. The links work and I am able to access all of them

Organization
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 * I feel that the side effects are scrambled around the paragraph and can be better optimized and organized.

Overall impressions
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 * . This addition is definitely headed in the right direction. I feel what is most beneficial is to reorganize the listing of effects and reword certain sections of the text.