User:Valeriebarajas/Esta Noche (gay bar)/Anavasquez32502 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Valerie Barajas


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Valeriebarajas/Esta Noche (gay bar)
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Esta Noche (gay bar)

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Lead

Based on what you have so far it seems you may not be planning to alter the lead section. Though I think it could be improved. If you're not planning on it I think you should. You could alter it to fight what you do plan on adding to the later portions of the article, polish it out to make your inclusions and the rest of the article more well-rounded and put together.

Content

What you've added to the History section felt very relevant to me and kind of an oversight in the Wiki article as it was before you started adding and editing. I would say the same about what you've added on Esta Noche's promotion of safe sex during the AIDS crisis. Both of these additions gave me a way better sense of this place and it's historical importance and significance. You likely plan on adding more I'm sure because as of now there's not much else you've changed. If it's possible it could be really great for the article to find pictures of the interior of the club.

Tone and Balance

There's no question for me of your neutrality in the sections you've added. To me it makes the rest of the article more neutral overall. I didn't get the sense that you were trying to convince me of anything as a reader of this article because you have just presented straight-forward facts with the evidence to back them up.

Sources and References

Currently it looks as though you only have one source and that source to me leaves a bit of it's credibility up to question. It seems to be some kind of news source but it's not one I've heard of. Upon further research into it looks to be quite reliable but the initial doubt I had could be easily overturned by adding more sources in general and more peer-reviewed sources.

Organization

Your writing style fits with what Wikipedia says they need. It's easy to read and gives a quick sense of what you're trying to say without personal bias in any direction. I think there's definitely room for more sectioning as you do more research though.

Overall you haven't presented too much here but what you have shown in a writing style congruent with Wikipedia readership and a lack of bias. I think you need to do more research, collect more sources, and continue to work on it but that's the plan for class anyway. Great job.