User:Vanessarianayala/Women in Mexico/Hawaiianislander02 Peer Review

I think you did a great job including the introductory sentence that describes the article’s topic and the major sections you were going to cover as you read on. I would elaborate further on the last statement about Mexico having the highest female homicide rate in the world, either describing why that is or what causes this? It seems random to leave that statement alone with no other details.

Your statements and information seems to be backed-up well with sources. I also liked that you had the word, “machismo,” highlighted to be directed to the definition page because that is a cultural term. After reading your article is really emphasized how women were minimalized to their opportunities, but overcame their obstacles. Women were always inferior to men and that idea still lingers toward in society, but to read about how more intense it was then is eye opening to how far we have come. The pictures were very helpful to illustrate each topic and there is the perfect amount. You touched thoroughly on all the aspects of how women have made their accomplishments from politics to art. It was helpful that you highlighted all names and important terms to keep the reader informed of the meaning of the words that may need clarification. Under the ‘Sexuality’ tab I would definitely incorporate the stereotypical view of Mexican or Hispanic women being sexualized in the media. Overall you did excellent on your article and it is very informative!

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