User:Vanilynnrenee/Ann Veronica Janssens/ScrumbulusSour Peer Review

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(Vanilynnrenee)
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 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Ann Veronica Janssens

Evaluate the drafted changes
I appreciate what you wrote about Ann Veronica's early life and family matters. I also think you did a good job summarizing her work life in a more digestible manner. I do think you should keep that other photo of Ann Veronica Janssens, L'odrre n'as pas d'ipmrotncae, along with her current fog work art. The more images the better I say.

I do feel as if you should keep the books and essay section separate, such as the subtitle Essay and then a bullet list of her works just to keep it more organized. Though your introduction was much needed to start that section off and I think you did a really great job. Also thank you for listing the artist's exhibitions, I do not understand why that was not listed before. Overall it is great research and editing!

Second Peer Review
I like that you decided to take the essay portion out and just leave the section 'Books' with the list provided below. I know you were starting from scratch but I do feel as if the selected exhibitions may be a little too long, just at first glance. I know we want to put as much information out there, but I was just thinking about what Professor Matuszak was saying about over load of information. Though I feel it is important to note everything an artist did and was apart of, but I do not know if it will be okay with the Professor.

I also think that maybe under Janssens work titled, Yellowbluepink (2015), you should add the expert you put under her Artist Work, "Janssens yellowbluepink is an enclosed room with colored LED lights built in, with artificial fog filling the room. Visitors are advised to move slowly throughout the room, to take in the ethereal experience, and to not run into any walls." under that photo, just to give that image more explanation and I think it may flow better there. I think you did a really great job though composing your draft!