User:Vanished user 7449738/Escape from L.A./Gisselolzba Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

I am reviewing Neutralplaid's article on Escape to L.A.


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Neutralplaid/Escape_from_L.A.?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Escape from L.A.

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead

There was no change to the lead.

Content

The plot section has not been greatly changed, but the parts that have been are more succinct and precise. Most of the edits are just polishing the existing article. The year the story begins is changed from 1998 to 2000 (this is the most significant change in the plot section). The production section and release section were expanded to give more useful information. All the content is relevant and up to date.

Tone and balance

The tone of the article is neutral, and does not try to influence the reader one way or the other. It is matter-of-fact, properly cited, and clear.

Sources and references

All the source links work, the only thing is some of the citations don't have to be added in the middle of the sentence but rather at the end. For example, " Like much of his filmography, (citation 8) Escape from L.A. was shot with Panavision anamorphic lenses. (citation 9)." I think both citations could be added at the end of the sentence to make it look a bit cleaner. The first part of the sentence doesn't need its own citation because it isn't really "fact".

Organization

I did not see any grammatical errors. The draft is clear and gives necessary information.

Images and media

There are no images/media. I don't think it's a pressing issue, but it couldn't hurt.

Overall impressions

I think the draft does a good job of polishing the existing article and adding new information. I definitely feel that by expanding the plot and release sections, the article feels more complete.