User:Vansam823/Brownfield land/Ari. gg02 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Vansam83


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Vansam823/Brownfield land - Wikipedia


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Brownfield land

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Great start for the article. An interesting topic was chosen, and it relates to the course content.

Lead:

Overall, the lead provided a good definition and starting point for the rest of the article. The author provided a well-written description that did not contain too much jargon.

As a suggestion, the first sentence could be rephrased: "The definition of Brownfield land varies and is decided by policy makers or and/or developers within different countries.", for example.

Sentence 2 could be rephrased for more fluidity: "The main difference between a piece of land being described as Brownfield or not is the presence or absence of pollution."

Sentences 3 and 4 can be merged into one for more sentence fluidity and less choppiness in the fourth sentence.

Article body:

United Kingdom

In the second sentence, add a period after the word infrastructure.

Good paraphrasing in this part and a great starting point for what is to come.

Extra points:

Keeping the consistency of how Brownfield is spelled is important. Keep it consistent with either a capital B or a lowercase b in every sentence.

I agree with the point in Italics in the Sandbox: the quote about the NPPF may have been too geared or too specific to one country which may present a bit of bias in the article.

For the section about the United Kingdom in the Article body, I am interested in seeing what else will be added to it apart from how the UK defines Brownfield land. In addition, can anything else be added to Canada and the United States aside from what the countries define as Brownfield land?

It is a neat topic to write about and explore how different countries interpret the concept of Brownfield land.

In conclusion, the author seems to have a good understanding of the topic. Key points to remember is the spelling of brownfield/Brownfield as it is the main topic it should be spelled consistently throughout the entirety of the article. More information apart from the countries' definitions of Brownfield land may be important to the reader. Why do these countries experience more Brownfield land? Are there any properties of these countries that induce the likability of Brownfield land development? Are these advantageous or not, and why? How do they affect humans in a negative and/or positive way? These could be interesting points of research for the rest of the article. Overall, well done!