User:Vebrown/Miss Gay Memphis/Emilyseatvet Peer Review

Lead

- the lead is very well written and very concise. It is also very easy to read. The only thing I would potentially change is make the part of it being disguised as a halloween event to a different part of the article.

Content

- The article is very good all of the content is very up to date and reliant to the article I would not take anything away from the article. It also deals with an Equity gap which is very refreshing to see.

Tone and Balence

Content is very neutral not biased in any way really great job!! Does not attempt to persuade the reader in anyway.

Sources and References

- Everything is backed up with good secondary sources and sources are very current. No notes great job!!

Organization

- I have no notes on organization. You have written a really really wonderful article. I have no other notes that I can think of. If I can think of any I will let you know but overall really great job iwht this article.

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Vebrown


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