User:Vedisobe/Cultural identity/Orangetruncate Peer Review

Hi Jenny! Looks like you're still working on fleshing out your first draft (that's okay, so am I!) Here's what I've got for your current sandbox:

LEAD:

-I think your proposed updates are great. I noticed that the existing lead has a ton of uncited statements, so it might be good to either omit or research those claims.

-The existing lead cites three "pieces" which comprise cultural identity: "cultural knowledge, category label, and social connections." I think this is probably worth keeping, but the rest of the article says nothing substantial about these categories. Maybe you could find a textbook which fleshes these out a bit? Could be a good way to inform the rest of the sections you want to add.

CONTENT:

-I think the content and structure of your proposed additions is spot-on! Personally I would put all of this right under the leading section, as I think the existing content is going to be secondary to your additions.

TONE AND BALANCE:

-Hard to say before it's written, but I think the broad outline is well-balanced.

SOURCES AND REFERENCES:

-Everything looks good to me!

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

-Good start! Please ping me on your talk page once you've begun your draft and I'd love to continue helping. Thanks so much for your work on this; this seems like such an important concept to have such a limited wikipedia entry!

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?
 * Chase2424


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:Vedisobe/Cultural identity
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Cultural identity

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