User:Veggietaquito/PH/Mimosa taco Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Veggietaquito


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Veggietaquito/PH?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * PH

Lead

 * The Lead does include an introductory sentence that states the article topic concisely, although the author could have merged the first 2 sentences into one.


 * For example: “In chemistry, pH (/piːˈeɪtʃ/), also referred to as acidity, historically denotes “potential of hydrogen” (or “power of hydrogen”) and it is a scale used to specify the acidity or basicity of an aqueous solution.”
 * It would have stated the article topic more concisely and accurate if the author states the use of pH before its meaning. For example: “ In chemistry, pH (/piːˈeɪtʃ/), also referred to as acidity, is a scale used to specific the acidity or basicity of an aqueous solution by the concentration of H+ ions. It historically denotes “potential of hydrogen” (or “power of hydrogen”).”


 * The Lead did broadly summarize all major points that are included in the article’s major sections - history, measurements, calculations, applications, definitions. Good job!.

Content

 * The content covers information that is very relevant to the topic. The links to articles for background information are also very relevant to the topic.

Tone and Balance

 * The tone of the article is still very neutral, with no claims that are heavily biased toward a particular position, so the article is very appropriate for an encyclopedia audience.


 * The peer did a good job in paraphrasing and rephrasing a number of sentence or paragraphs to simplify the content.

Organization

 * There was clear organization of heading and subheadings, with no grammatical or spelling errors detected. The peer also successfully removed filler words/ phrases or replaced them with simpler words that made the content more complex to understand (pH indicator, for example).


 * There are some sentences where the peer can avoid using passive voice. For example:
 * Instead of “For more precise measurements, the color can be measured using a colorimeter or spectrophotometer.”, replace it with “A colorimeter or spectrophotometer can measure the color for more precise measurements.”


 * The content added is very well written. The peer also divided certain paragraphs into logical separated sections that are very helpful to understand the content and the topic.


 * It makes more sense to have separated sections for definition and measurements. Good job!


 * My suggestion would be defining the concentration of hydrogen ions and hydroxide ions as [H+] and [OH-], respectively, at the beginning, either in the lead or definition.


 * I prefer the original second sentence from the second paragraph in the Application section than that in the revised version.

Images and Media

 * The peer did not add new image or media, however, they did rearrange the table “Average pH of common solutions” from “Definitions and Measurements” section in the original content to the “pH Indicators” sub-section in “Measurements” (which makes a lots more sense).
 * My suggestion would be to mention the figure(s) and table(s) in the paragraphs before their appearance.

OVERALL

 * Many small revisions the peer did greatly improve the quality of the article by simplifying many contents that were originally phrased in the way that an encyclopedia audience may find it hard to understand. The peer also did a great job in breaking down large paragraphs to many sub-sections and sub paragraphs in a very logical fashion. Some suggestions that can drastically improve the quality of the article would be including newer sources in the past ten years, as well as rephrasing a number of sentences into active voice instead of passive voice. Also, the figures and the tables should be mention ahead in the paragraphs before their appearance.