User:VerdantAurum/Ethnic identity development/Jaylaa20 Peer Review

Hi, VerdantAurum!

I think you adding a new section dedicated to Social/Psychology Models for Ethnic Identity is a good idea. This section gives a more neutral and balanced view into the different models that relate to ethnic identity development. Even if Phinney's model is the major one studied in this field, it is still important to give at least an overview of the ones not mentioned as much. You can compare and contrast them to Phinney's model, too.

Under Other Considerations, the article talks about how how most of the research was conducted in Europe and the US. Maybe information from other places will help give a more well-rounded view of ethnic identity development, and how other cultures identify it. This can probably be made into a whole other section itself depending on what you find.

I hope some of this feedback helped!

~Jaylaa20

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VerdantAurum


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 * User:VerdantAurum/Ethnic identity development


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 * Ethnic identity development

Evaluate the drafted changes
Hi, VerdantAurum!

I think you adding a new section dedicated to Social/Psychology Models for Ethnic Identity is a good idea. This section gives a more neutral and balanced view into the different models that relate to ethnic identity development. Even if Phinney's model is the major one studied in this field, it is still important to give at least an overview of the ones not mentioned as much. You can compare and contrast them to Phinney's model, too.

Under Other Considerations, the article talks about how how most of the research was conducted in Europe and the US. Maybe information from other places will help give a more well-rounded view of ethnic identity development, and how other cultures identify it. This can probably be made into a whole other section itself depending on what you find.

I hope some of this feedback helped!

~Jaylaa20