User:VeronikaRoberts33/Sarah Tyson Rorer/Along 2023 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

VeronikaRoberts33


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Sarah Tyson Rorer


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
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What I think needs to be added are : who she is, why she is important, and what her accomplishments are. You need to figure out how to break up the bibliography because the tone is harsh and doesn't blend well together. The organization is all over the place and I think that by fixing that it will benefit you in the long run. The other section is throwing me off as well. Either put it some where else or get rid of it.