User:VeronikaRoberts33/Sarah Tyson Rorer/AzlynPorter Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

VeronikaRoberts33


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:VeronikaRoberts33/Sarah_Tyson_Rorer?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Sarah Tyson Rorer

Evaluate the drafted changes
This group's sentence is great in terms of content. However, for wording, instead using "like Table Talk Magazine..." I'd use "such as Table Talk Magazine..." or "including Table Talk Magazine...". The added content is relevant to the topic, but I don't know if it supplements the surrounding material because I'm not able to see where this group will be including it within the article. The reference was attached correctly to their sentence so it was easy to access, and it was from a reliable source. The referenced website mentions Table Talk and Ladies Home Journal, but I did not see any mention of Household New or Good House Keeping.