User:VictorFuentesGWH166

Bio
My name is Victor Fuentes of classroom GWH 166, and I'm a student in the pacific northwest. Some of my hobbies include, but are not limited to: playing guitar, lifting weights, drawing, and watching horror movies. My favorite sport to watch on TV is basketball because of it's fast-paced and exciting plays, and since I spent a big chunk of my childhood in Houston Texas my favorite NBA team is the Huston Rockets. Although I enjoy watching basketball my favorite sport to participate in is wrestling, because it's one of the most rewarding things you can ever do. Wrestling is a tough sport, but it teaches you discipline, mental toughness, and confidence, whether it's through the grueling practices or the heart-wrenching defeats that you endure it's all worth it in the end when you're able to taste the fruits of your labor and indulge in victory.

I'm interested in the cinema and television side of Wikipedia because of how much entertainment I consume daily. So if I were to be involved with Wikipedia long term, then I'd most likely write about television shows and their characters. For example, I'd like to write about TV shows like Chuck, How I met Your Mother, and Brooklyn Nine-Nine.

Article evaluation
I recently watched an obscure Australian horror movie about the drowning of a young girl, called Lake Mungo. Along with its haunting visuals, the film is accompanied by a creepy and bone-chilling score. No matter how much I tried to forget it, the ominous tones just kept repeating in my head, leading me to wonder who the mastermind behind Lake Mungo's score was. I found out that Dai Paterson was the one responsible for Lake Mungo's phenomenal score, but who is the elusive Dai Paterson exactly? I visited the Dai Paterson page on Wikipedia and found three aspects of it worth commenting on: its poor use of links, its lack of sources, and its neutral tone.

Poor use of links
Though the article has many links, some are broken, like "The Turner Affair" and "Dreams For Life", movies that Dai Paterson was apart of. At times the use of links seems to be unnecessary. For example, the lead paragraph starts with "Dai Paterson (born 24 April 1977) is an Australian stage actor who has appeared in such television series as Beastmaster and Dog's Head Bay." Now, linking the television shows "Beastmaster" and "Dog's Head Bay" makes sense because not everyone may be familiar with them, but there was no point in linking "Australian" or "Actor" because we all know what Australians and actors are.

Lack of sources
The article contains only one source, an article on theage.com.au from 2004 titled "The chicken or the egg?", used to confirm Dai Paterson's participation in the 2004 play "Happy New". There is no other source used in the entire article. The facts provided by the article are not accompanied by any citations. For instance under the section titled, "Early life and education" it says, "Paterson was born in Tasmania, Australia. His parents were both involved with the local theatre in Tasmania " without any citations leading to a source, making it so that there's no way of knowing whether or not the information is true, or made up by an anonymous Wikipedia user. Another example of the article's neglect for sources is under the section titled, "Career", where it states, "Paterson's film debut started with Australian band Silverchair in their music video for their song "Emotion Sickness". Again there are no citations leading to a source that can verify the article's claim, for all we know Dai Paterson's film debut could've been on a cat food commercial.

Neutral tone
The tone remains neutral throughout the article, as it delivers information like an actual encyclopedia. The information is presented through facts, instead of opinionated statements and there are no signs of biased language. The information just states factual information on Dai Paterson's life, education, and career. An example can be seen in the section titled, "Early life and education", where it says, "His formal education took him to the National Institute of Dramatic Art (NIDA) in Sydney, Australia." This line purely states that Dai Paterson attended the National Institute of Dramatic Art in Sydney, Australia, and doesn't give off any form of biased language. Another instance of the article's neutral tone can be seen in the section titled, "Career", where it states, "In 2003 Paterson starred opposite Maria Mercedes in Anna Kannava's art house film Dreams For Life. Paterson played the role of Martin. The film had an Australian release and received film industry nominations and awards, and was seen in film festivals in Australia, France, North America, Cyprus, and Italy." The article just informs us on Dai Paterson role in the film "Dreams For Life" and that the film was nominated and won some awards, and where it was screened. It never says whether or not the movie was good or bad and neither does it comment on Dai Paterson's performance. The article's information is altogether factual and is not swayed by personal bias.

Summary
The Dai Paterson Wikipedia page is pretty fascinating, but it has a couple of issues. The use of links and the links themselves are faulty, so if someone were to go in and remove a couple of useless links, and replace some of the broken links, then it'd greatly improve the article. Another issue and arguably the worst offense is the lack of sources. The article has only one source and if that isn't bad enough it's from 2004. The absorbent use of links must have been used as a supplement for the absence of sources, and so if a couple of sources were to be added to the article and cited next to some of the claims, the article would become significantly better. One thing that it does have going for it though is its neutral tone. The article remains neutral, stating only facts, and straying away from biased statements and language.