User:VictorMW/Civil Rights Activist Edison Uno/Victoria0998 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

VictorMW


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Edison Uno
 * Edison Uno

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead: I think it is pretty cohesive, but contains information that is not present in the article. Some of the information in the lead could either be moved into later sections or at least fleshed out in the content sections.

Content: Right now, the only section in the content section is on his early life/the lead is more developed, so you could add more information on the work he did into the content portion of the article. If possible, sections could be added to expand on his role with the redress movement, his work in civil rights issues, and/or his work with UCSF. The early life section is well-developed!

Overall, this is really well-written, well-referenced, and a strong start on the article. Good job!!