User:Victoria.reeves1997/Cultivation theory/Jrm168 Peer Review

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(Victoria.reeves1997) & (ZIB0713)
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 * User:Victoria.reeves1997/Cultivation theory
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 * Cultivation theory

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Victoria.reeves1997: You have done a very good job with adding useful information to your theory sandbox. Your lead looks good with what you have added to it. In your description, I would have liked to read more about "Resonance" so I recommend adding a few more sentences to that paragraph. "The perceptions of violence" and "TV viewing and fear of crime" also look good what what you have wrote. I am not sure if you had added anything to the "Background" section so make sure you add or change a couple of sentences to that. Do not forget to add your references and bold them as well.

ZIB0713: I really enjoyed reading about the section that you have added to the Cultivation Theory. For "Dramatic Violence" I would recommend putting the definition sentence at the beginning rather than in the middle. Same goes with the "Sexual attitudes". Other than that, good job.