User:Victoria0998/Casamance conflict/Stummarakota Peer Review

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Victoria0998


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 * User:Victoria0998/Casamance conflict


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Casamance conflict

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead: No changes made to lead

Background: I think Geography and Demographic Differences fit in nicely with a Background section. However, the French Rule, which I think is more powerful of a heading than Colonialism, should be put in history. While it does offer background on the conflict, it hits more nicely in a historical overview rather than Background which is more time-universal.

1970s: The new information you added here is consistent with the tone of the article and is well-sourced. It does seem a bit "stop-and-go" and all of the topics don't flow together well. For example, the sentence talking about boarding schools doesn't have any relation to the previous sentence. Thus, a couple more transitions, even if just clauses, would help tie the whole thing together.

1980s: This was a really strong section that had a lot of information that flowed well together. I would explain exactly how the Sengalese government drove the MDFC underground. I would also add more information on the Sengalese government, their motivations, and their viewpoints. The article leans very heavily towards the MDFC and neglects to include information on the other side of the conflict.

Find a Place For This: I think the first two facts will be really well-placed in the French Colonialism section which can be time-expansive (1800s - 1940s) if you want it to be.

Organization: The organization is well done and I think using timepoints in history is smart.

Content/Sources: All the content thus far seems to be historically accurate and backed up by peer-reviewed sources.