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Peer Review: Vscartapenna, *Hayter Reed

Interesting topic! The lead section is off to a good start. I would refrain from using adverbs like “very” since they are neither needed nor useful. Also, be mindful of minor spelling errors like “fro” in the second sentence of your lead section and punctuation errors throughout. I think the best way to approach the first few sentences of your lead section is by sticking to the most basic and necessary information. For example, I would begin it with a sentence like “Sara Riel (insert birth and death date, if possible) was the first Métis Grey Nun (insert the specified period to indicate when he was most active) from the Selkirk Settlement in Red River.”

Overall your outline is also off to a good start, offering a clear structure and balanced content. I look forward to reviewing your progress. Good luck!

Article evaluation - notes Watch out for a bias opinion: Check out the sources, make sure they are reliable: it should be clear and easy to fallow, with good writing and spelling Balanced outlook on the subject Everything should be sourced - '''article evaluation - red river colony https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Red_River_Colony '''Is everything in the article relevant to the article topic? Is there anything that distracted you? Is the article neutral? Are there any claims, or frames, that appear heavily biased toward a particular position? Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented? The article is shown to take a natural stand, and doesn’t sway in favour of one side or the other. Check a few citations. Do the links work? Does the source support the claims in the article? the citation links work and the sources support the claims of the artical, they look to be reliable sources Is each fact referenced with an appropriate, reliable reference? Where does the information come from? Are these neutral sources? If biased, is that bias noted? The sources come from valid sources, like the Toronto press, and the governors of red river settlement.. etc. Is any information out of date? Is anything missing that could be added? WIth the knowledge i have on the subject it looks like everything is up to date, there hasnt been much reserch on the subject in the most resent years but the information that has come up has been added.There seems to be missing maybe the story of before the colony, maybe expanding on the 'why' it was important to settle there Check out the Talk page of the article. What kinds of conversations, if any, are going on behind the scenes about how to represent this topic? How is the article rated? Is it a part of any WikiProjects?'Bold text'Bold text''' I don’t think its part of a project, How does the way Wikipedia discusses this topic differ from the way we've talked about it in class?'''

Assignment #4 I chose the artical on Sarah Riel, there is few sentences written on her already but i feel like there isn't anything on what she did or who she was. i know her life was relatively short living till she was only 34, but she was related to a very important figure in Canadian history and i think she may have had an impac on Louis. There are countless correspondents between the two, i want to look at if she had an impact on his actions or maybe she tried to stop the rebellion. there are many questions that surround her and i was to explore them a bit more then just reading that she was a gray nun and metis.

Assignment #5 - outline

Sara Riel

Sara Riel was a highly educated member and active member of the Gray Nuns. She is best known fro being the elder sister to Métis rebellion leader Louis Riel. She was born in 1848 in the Red river settlement to parents Jean-Louis Riel and Juile (Lagimodière) Riel. As a young child she was surrounded by the word of God, being educate by Sisters of the charity but also by her mothers dedication to the christian faith. She was inspired to take the vow of sister hood after her brother Louis was to join the priest hood. Although Louis did not become a priest, Sara actively took the vow in XXXX. She taught languages and arts at the Gray Nuns boarding schools between 18XX-18XX. In 1871 she became the first métis missionary from Red River and set off for Ile-a-La-Cross  in northern Saskatchewan.Sara actively wrote to her family telling them of her experiences, wishes and hopes for them. He writings also showed a sympathetic view on the eve of the revolution. With her brother being an active member in leading the revolution against the government, in 1869 the congregation feared for her safety and she was moved several times within a few years. Even though she took no active part in the cause, she provide support to her brother and a voice to the métis in the catholic church.
 * 1) Family
 * 2) * Sara was born in 1848 in Red River. Her father, Jean-Louis Riel (DOB 1817) was a voyager for the North West Company. His background was that of a French- Canadian. Her mother, Julie Riel (Lagimodière) (DOB 1822) was also from a French background who integrated with the Métis culture and passed on their traditions to their children.    Sara was the second child of 8. Her and her older brother Louis, held a special bond.
 * 3) * 'the Riel family were members of the Red River Elite, and the Children lived a privileged life, close to the church' but between the 1840's-1985's the Riel family went through hard times economically but that did not affect there social position
 * 4) Education
 * 5) * She was educated by the Sisters of the Charity boarding school in St. Boniface.  She entered the congregation in 1865. In 1868 she became the first metis Gray Nune from red river - she was at St. Boniface Pensionnat from 1858-1866, where she learned French, English, history, math, painting, music. But she also learned household types skils like cooking and cleaning but also spin, knit, sewing, and embroidering.  - The Gray Nuns believed that orderliness and cleanliness of metis were a representation of the schooling provided by the Church - Sara was educated and learned many languages including French, English, cree and michif. This made her suited to become a teacher. She could and would serve also as a ‘cultural mediator between male missionary oblate of mary immaculate and aboriginal woman and between the church hierarchy and the HBC”
 * 6) * By the time Louis and Sara Riel completed there formal education, the firmly believed that suffering adn self sacrifice were the true path of salvation
 * 7) * after the death of her father in 1864, Louis became the head of the family, Louis and the rest of the family were forced to quit school to help the family, all but Sara left school.
 * 8) Religion and the Gray Nuns
 * 9) * 22 June 1871, started the mission to Ile-a-La-Cross  in northern Saskatchewan, Le Métis (news paper) reported “Sister Riel, Sister of Mr. Louis Riel, how ever, had been designated to accompany her(Sister Charlebois), she id believed the first missionary from the métis nation of Red River, given to this Greal Apostolic work, and one could not fined a ,more dignified person. a kind heart, keen intelligence and in exhaustible charity distinguished this new missionary, her departure is a sacrifice for her family ans the entire population, but at the same time it is an honor and a blessing for us” she was not the only métis or mixed blood to join teh congregation of gray nuns,after 1845  there was a larger number of woman who joined the cause.
 * 10) The Métis Rebellion
 * 11) * 1869: the congregation feared fro her safety as the rebellion started to unfold. she was moved back to St.Boniface. She was not impressed the the choice to move her when she learned that she would have to preform manual. she seen this a demotion . she wrote “The annual autumn changes took place today on the 20th. my mission to St.Norber is over. The order placed me in the day school. I must also mend and was the community linen-- a job that occupies me continuously without fatigues”
 * 12) * It is documented that the gray nuns sympathies with the métis cause even though their religion restrained them from participating and showing sympathy
 * 13) * “ Sara wrote to her brother; truthfully I believe it would be an insult to God if I doubted for only a second the complete success of our cause .. remember last winter when everything seemed over. it was God’s will that you should be overthrown, it overthrown in order to better your success”
 * 14) * she wrote to her brother Louis in September 1868, “Louis, chase away the sad and troubling thoughts to which our last meeting gave birth. which time and the grace of God, the darkness of the present will disappear. Be confident! until then, we must do out dutys. you as a fervent christian and me as a sister of charity”
 * 15) * After Louis first fled Manitoba, he thought to have preserved the métis culture but was informed by Sara soon after that they faced even more dificulties sense he left,  Louis let us bury our sorrows in the wounds of his(God) sacred heart...to love and pray, these are the arms with which we must fight to vanquish the conqueror
 * 16) Life After the Rebellion
 * 17) * 1872 she almost died, after a miraculous recovery her changes her name to “Marguerite-Marie of alacoque” after a vision from god
 * 18) * Sara was often mentioned in the writings of the gray nuns and the settlements where they taught
 * 19) Legacy - What we know about her today
 * 20) 1970’s she is talked about as a “pale representation of her brother”
 * 21) Her writing lets historians and scholars have a new and different perspective to Canada's development
 * 22) She is a woman, métis and religious
 * 1) She is a woman, métis and religious