User:Victoriawesloh/Jennifer White Johnson/BessWilliamson Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

(provide username) VictoriaWesloh


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Victoriawesloh/Jennifer_White_Johnson?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * n/a

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

LEAD

First sentence should identify what she does (not who she is); move disabled Afro-Latina to second sentence.

Her name should be bold. Are you able to find her birth year?

You could also include a description of major sections in the lead. I find it's easiest to look at other established articles for an example. (I've been using Jacob Lawrence - wiki edu also suggests Ada Lovelace).

CONTENT

Use last name to refer to her (White-Johnson, not Jennifer)

Career: I would suggest "brands including" instead of "brands like"

Exhibitions: is it possible to list or describe any of the works included in these exhibitions? or link to wiki pages of any other artists represented (if they have pages)? Link to arts institutions too (Palo Arts Center, etc). Also link to wiki pages for concepts such as neurodiversity, Black power.

Black Disabled Lives Matter symbol: one "advanced" type of research you could do here is finding other sites that reference the symbol even if they don't reference Johnson - perhaps search Library articles for "Black Disabled Lives Matter"

TONE

all seems neutral, informative & fact based. I think it's possible that some details of appearances, etc may be deemed not notable enough but let's see what wiki editors say...

SOURCES

IMO the use of her website is for information rather than biased points of view, which should work.

ORGANIZATION

I wonder if you might want to list the Black Disabled Lives Matter symbol first under early life, then a category for Exhibitions & Campaigns that includes the exhibitions + the Autism Advocacy Month Photo work. These seem disjointed when listed separately.

IMAGES/MEDIA - I will discuss in class in a future week, but you could check to see if the symbol is copyrighted under Creative Commons to include it. Most of our class' work won't be able to have images due to copyright, but since her symbol is open access it might be an exception. There is a training about this that you can do (now or when we cover in class)

NEW ARTICLE REVIEW

I think the article makes a good case for notability, including news coverage and the dispersal of BDLM symbol (but could be improved if you can show additional coverage), as well as her work being collected by arts orgs.

See my notes about linking to other pages. You can also look for gender and race-specific categories (such as Women Artists) in WikiProjects.