User:Vidyabhargava/Redlining/MeghanBedi Peer Review

General info
Charlie, Vidya, Mannat
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing https://docs.google.com/document/d/1yr6hZh7aPIqy3dE7LflNTRBbQNywZEtREHEVb3XyTdo/edit
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Redlining
 * Redlining

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

While more detailed comments have been left on the document provided, our overarching recommendations would be to make sure you are eliminating any personal opinion rhetoric, and fully clarifying everything you're saying (even if it has been mentioned earlier somewhere in the article).