User:Vincentooi808/Educational technology/Wombatsaregreat Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Vincentooi808


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Vincentooi808/Educational_technology?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Educational technology

Evaluate the drafted changes
Your practice sections are very relevant, up to date, and organized. I think you should focus on shifting away from essay-writing voice to encyclopedia voice and move away from the in-text citations and references to scholarly sources from NTH :-) I like how you brought in your PE's work to your article, and the "Technologies" section is formatted and written in a way that is concise, clear, easy to read and neutral-toned. For the Advantages and Disadvantages sections, I would love to see a more neutral voice and more encyclopedia tone and cut down on the writing, and your The Future of Online Education: The Next Steps section looks really promising and adds a lot to the article (just remember to get rid of referencing i.e. "This expansion has led my PE organization").