User:Vincentooi808/Personalized learning/Wombatsaregreat Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Vincentooi808


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Vincentooi808/Personalized_learning?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Personalized learning

Evaluate the drafted changes
Your lead section is easy to understand and there is a clear structure to your sandbox article. Overall, this looks amazing! You definitely have balanced coverage, reliable sources and coverage, and a neutral voice. One small suggestion is to change the past-tense verbs to present tense when quoting an author who is still alive, i.e. "Aflie Kohn writes" vs. "Alfie Kohn wrote" and to rephrase "Even enthusiasts for the concept admit that personal learning is an evolving term and doesn't have any widely accepted definition." from your history to be more fact-based and add a citation for the claim. Overall, great job!! These all seem like really important contributions to your page.